Wednesday, June 3, 2015

Around Pinehill School

One chilly morning, as I sat beside a metal pole.I could feel the cold winter breeze as it lightly brushed against me. I felt the hard concrete as I relaxed to write in my book, while birds chirped sweetly and happily. There were children running around playfully and teachers walking around happily like rabbits. The rain from last night created puddles of water which I could smell from a little distance. There was silence and every few second or minute there would be a car come by with its roaring engine. If you listen hard enough you will be able to hear a couple of birds flapping its wings. As it started to warm up you would hear the crickets buzzing loudly in the bushes.More kids came and got noisier.The sun rose up and warmth was everywhere! but some still remained wind.




yellow is compound sentence 

blue is simple sentence 

pink is complex sentence  

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  2. Awesome Claire
    I like this bit
    The birds chirped sweetly and happily. There were children running around playfully and teachers walking around happily like rabbits

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  3. i love it all its very good , but maybe next add a bit more simple sentences

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